The housing shortage in big cities can cause severe social consequences. Some people think only government action can solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
1. Some opposing such a statement may assert that individuals can alleviate such tension by altering their traditional views or persuading others to migrate to some developing areas. * 针对“需求者多”,写总起句:自己改变想法或他人劝说。
2. This is mainly because the sea of people each year tend to flood into metropolitan areas, as they hold the conventional wisdom that only when dwelling in large cities can they seek for better job opportunities, which further incurs the scarcity of housing. * 进一步解释「需求者多」的原因:外来人口多(常见的urbanisation带来的问题)。
3. Once average people change such a convention, the number of residents in modern cities will diminish, thus relieving the crisis. * 「自己改变想法 或 他人劝说」的相对合理性。
4. However, although ordinary people can persuade others not to crowd into large cities, they are not empowered to force others to do so. * 反驳部分:没有什么太多作用。
5. In comparison, the government can issue certain subsidisation policies to make rural areas more attractive alternatives. * 政府解决问题更有效:不发达区域的补贴政策,吸引外来者选择周边地区而非大城市。
【解析】 1. 内容(Task Response)*** 特别重要 *** . 见文中批注。
2. 组织(Coherence and Cohesion)*** 尤其重要 *** . 见文中批注。
4. 语法(Grammatical Range and Accuracy) . 第1句:主句为 some (后跟v.ing非谓语作定语后置) + assert + that引导的宾语从句 (by doing sth. or doing sth.是完成alleviate这个动作的方式状语) . 第2句:主句为 this is + because 引导的表语从句 + as 引导原因状语从句 (that引导同位语从句,解释说明conventional wisdom具体内容; that后为 only when…can they…部分倒装结构) + which引导的非限定性定语从句,指代前面这件事。