In many cities, planners tend to arrange shops, schools, offices, and homes in specific areas and separate them from each other. Do you think the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages?
1. However, the detriments that this policy has must not be overlooked. * 承上启下,表明接下来写坏处。
2. The most distinct one is that this kind of city planning can actually inconvenience residents. * 总写坏处1: 不便利性。
3. To illustrate, separating those districts with a certain function means a much longer commuting distance if individuals wish to do more than one specific task a day, such as picking up their children from the school after work and then going shopping for some ingredients for dinner. * 进一步解释坏处1: 根据日常所需,完成所有日程,需要绕一大圈,通勤距离变长。
4. Another problem is that there may be more traffic congestion, especially from the residential area to the office district during the rush hour, as people are very likely to have similar lifestyles and daily schedules. * 坏处2: 人们往往有相似的作息,导致高峰期更容易拥堵。
【解析】 1. 内容(Task Response)*** 特别重要 *** . 见文中批注。
2. 组织(Coherence and Cohesion)*** 尤其重要 *** . 见文中批注。
4. 语法(Grammatical Range and Accuracy) . 第3句:主句 (separating 的动名词作主语 means…) + if引导条件状语从句 + such as 后跟 动名词举例 (and 连接的是 picking up… & going shopping) . 第4句:主句为 another problem is + that 引导的表语从句 + as 引导的原因状语从句。