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  2016年8月20日雅思大作文范文及解析(社会问题)

  慈善机构charity organisations

  2016年8月20日雅思写作题目

  Some people think charity organisations should help people in great need wherever they live. However, others think they should help people in their own country. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.

  2016年8月20日雅思大作文范文-第一段

  Charity organisations are supposed to offer help to people in great need, such as those suffering from incurable diseases, natural disasters and unexpected accidents.Yet one issue is still in debate: to whom should the money of charity organisations go,exclusively to people who live in the same country as the organisations, or to all people regardless of where they live? To my mind, the answer to this question depends largely on the mission of specific charity organisations.

  2016年8月20日雅思大作文范文第一段解析：

  开头段，先定义charity organisation引出话题，然后重述题目中的问题，最后提出自己的观点。请注意：唐老师没有照抄原题，而是对其进行了重新表述，这是语言表达水平的一个重要方面，学生需要不断练习才能真正提升这个能力。

  such as... 往往能够给我们提供一个机会来展示我们的知识水平。这里的such as those suffering from...完全可以不要，但正是这个such as后面的内容，让考官看到了学生的知识面和表达力。

  to my mind,... 是一个很有用的短语，意思为“我认为”。多数学生会使用in my view, in my opinion, as far as I am concerned。

  看一看老师在本段使用的几个副词(组)。exclusively = only; regardless of = no matter; largely = mainly

  2016年8月20日雅思大作文范文-第二段

  One important reason why some people hold the same-country view is that, as they see it, the charity money comes from the rich people and other donators who live in the same country as those needy people, and naturally the charity organisations should help them rather than people from other countries.This is partly true, especially to the local charity groups whose chief concern is to solve the local problems. Yet for such organisations as Bill Gates Charity Foundation whose money comes from the entire world, it is far from enough only to help Americans, although it is headquartered in the U.S. As a matter of fact, Bill Gates Charity Foundation, along with other “global” charity groups, has extended its help to all people in all countries and regions throughout the world.

  2016年8月20日雅思大作文范文第二段解析：

  本段论证不同规模不同性质的慈善机构使用钱的方向不同。区分两类慈善机构：地区性的和全球性的。

  As they see it,... 在他们看来

  This is partly true,... 这有一半是正确的

  It is far from enough to... 做......远远不够

  As a matter of fact = in fact, actually 事实上

  2016年8月20日雅思大作文范文-第三段

  Besides, there are charity organisations that address different issues, some of which being daily necessities, others being disease control, environmental protection, to name only a few. Some of these issues are local while others are global in nature. Generally, local charity groups play a more important role in addressing local issues though outside help is also always welcomed, while in face of those global issues like disease control or environmental protection, charity organisations need to travel across territorial borders and offer help to those who live in any part of the world.

  2016年8月20日雅思大作文范文第三段解析：

  本段论证解决不同问题的慈善机构使用钱的方向也不同，将慈善机构分为解决区域问题的机构和解决全球性问题的机构。

  to name only a few相当于“等等”，多数同学会用and so on...

  while在这里引导转折，相当于but。

  2016年8月20日雅思大作文范文-第四段

  To conclude, where the charity money should go is mainly determined by the chief concerns and missions of different charity organisations.An organisation aiming at solving local issues should spend its money helping people who live in the same country, but if an organisation sets its eyes on global issues, it should not confine itself to a single country.

  2016年8月20日雅思大作文范文第四段解析：

  本段为结尾段，对前文论述的内容进行重新概括，注意在用语上要与前文保持一定差异。

  必须学习本段用不同句型来表达近似内容的方法。an organisation aiming at solving local issues... = if an organisation aims at solving local issues, it ...

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